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 Post Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 6:05 pm 
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This here is a poem which took me 2 days to compose. I 've posted 2 of mine before if any seen those. Sometimes it's hard to take something that doesn't matter to you and put it into words.......but not in this case. I found inspiration from a certain someone and the words of this poem came easy when i thought of her.
This poem is dedicated to a certain Autumn Star.

"A Virate Into Beauty Beheld"

A glance in unswathe 'twas an only passion he doth covet.
Not a step 'fro Eleithias and sway 'oh Lybian peaks of vigor.
Satirists imbued whose vulgar sarcasm and drunken wit decieve her.
Of fettered minds before me, so timid and malignant their hearts.
What is spoken nor enwritten in justly manner befitting beauty?
My contempt grasps obscenity, the disdainful filth behold her not.
Liriodendron Tulipiferum blooms of sonorous voice begotten of mourne.
Patience bereft of soul, so guards and unseen goddess form.
Alas, i cradle only Averse eye of dull and distraught ideal; a lesser fable.
Triumphant as she, felling foes and scattering their ashes.
Lo, arrogance of man pierces not her countenance!
Upon Eblis whose riven wings tangle Paean with Iktomi Lore.
Mirth thy passioned woe, thine gift to weeping echoes!
Can idiocy himself not see the kindness of autumn soul?
Old haunted garden, feel not a quiver amongst rose-born wilt.
Her shining presence a myriad of gorgeous and delicate features; i tell.
She feigns Beresina soil, treading with earthly feet 'lo Majesty of Life.
At length, no dread the endeavor so arrested by her starry smile.
Assembled Praxeum engulfed in silence from her jeweled-eye stare.
Draping an immortal horizon, her hair and it's flames touch angled dusk.
Reflection, as her moonlit skin fades to pallid gloom; bringer of mist.
Yet, from sunken R'lyeh didst thine glimpse such feminine divinity.
I, through winding time am lone of few, blessed of lavender art thou.
Demon to stifled vain tormented before an annointed portrait of passivity.
Armorial hall devoutly glorified, sorrow-lined abyss so dauntlessly hideous.
Masqued in phantasmed revelry to jest her glamoured company.
Elysium, cold darkness fasting as wildly as wind-thrown flambeaux.
Didst ignorant Typhon pitch trophied elegies upon her Bridge of Dour?
Free is her passion, carved of acanthus stone; in an ornamented fashion.
Pallor, bewildered Antediluvian centered below incongruous Exequy.
Their gibbered, poisoned scorn fall beneath her and ever more.
Alluded 'thou "Kliffot" for strength is renewed through gentle hands.
Such senescent things entangled inimitably in transcended thought.
It is these possessions that man so enviously covets.
Be it still, she wanders unchained and ever free; only Wicapi Ptanyetu...

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I like it. I can tell you listen to black metal because of the vocabulary. Very good.


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hey will, hey shawn!
i really like what i was able to figure out.... what i must admit, ain't much :(
would somebody please translate that into a language, I too understand?!?
that would be great....


and william: r'lyeh? what the hell does your autumn star have in common with the cthulhu myth?!? 8O or am i sooooo predictable?!?

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LavenderCheetah wrote:
hey will, hey shawn!
i really like what i was able to figure out.... what i must admit, ain't much :(
would somebody please translate that into a language, I too understand?!?
that would be great....


I don't know forshure how to translate it. The reason I say it is really good is it sound like something that the band Hidden In The Fog would write. And I love that band.

I can kinda follow the story but not all the way.


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hm... ok :( so i hope that the writer of this poem might come online to explain it's content and meaning to me.... but thank you anyway, shawn

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LavenderCheetah wrote:
hey will, hey shawn!
i really like what i was able to figure out.... what i must admit, ain't much :(
would somebody please translate that into a language, I too understand?!?
that would be great....


and william: r'lyeh? what the hell does your autumn star have in common with the cthulhu myth?!? 8O or am i sooooo predictable?!?
:lol: I only used R'lyeh because i love putting mythological/fantastical locations into my poems. It makes them seem more versed in my eyes. And i knew you weren't going to be able to understand a lot of it but i'm glad you were able to figure out a little. One thing you must understand with poems is that you must let a person come up with their own interpretation of the words and the way they are used. It's one thing my old literary teacher used to say. But still, if you want to know the meaning of certain phrases just let me know. :wink:

And thanks for the comment, Shawn. Comparing my poem to Black Metal is something i didn't expect. 8)

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It's true. Just read the lyrics to Hidden In The Fog's album "Damokles".


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Thanks again for the comparison. I'll post more in the future to be sure and i can tell you right now, more than likely it will be as indecipherable as this one. :lol:

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dear will,
thank you again for this great poem!
lots of hugs :hug:

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