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 Post subject: Rik's "poems"!
 Post Posted: Mon Jan 17, 2005 2:26 pm 
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I don't usually wright poems, or to be more precise I have never ever written a poem!
But I thought I'd give it a try! This might be turned into lyrics! But not sure about that! :think:

Don't want to say to much about it! Just that it's about an EX-(best)friend of mine!

I hope you like it! But even if you don't please let me know! And let me know why! Just a simple no I don't like it tells me nothing! If you like it or you don't like it just say why not! ;) Thank you! :)

You used to be my friend,
I used to call you mate.
You’re destroying all your friendships,
and I hope you realise this, before it is to late.

Friendships take a long time to build.
But can be undone in just one second.
I don’t know if you feel the same,
but that is what I reckon.

At first you seem friendly and nice,
you seem like someone you can trust
and is always around.
But when someone has a problem,
You’re nowhere to be found.

Some say that no man is an island,
But you should be careful how many
bridges you burn.
Because before you know it,
you’ll have nowhere else to turn.


Rik!

Edit : Well I changes the titel of this thread, because well duh, it's more then one now! :P

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Thats very good, i especially like the last part:

"Some say that no man is an island,
But you should be careful how many
bridges you burn.
Because before you know it,
you’ll have nowhere else to turn."

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Nightshade wrote:
Thats very good, i especially like the last part:

"Some say that no man is an island,
But you should be careful how many
bridges you burn.
Because before you know it,
you’ll have nowhere else to turn."


Thank you! :D
Thats my favorite bit myself! I wrote it down, but I wanted to add just one more thing! But I had driving lessons so I couldn't do it right away!
But after I came back that bit was born! (well it was born on the road! yeah I know I should have had my thoughts on driving :roll: but I was inspirert so I couldn't help it! :oops:)

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i think you forgot the part about beating penguins with a bat


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i think you forgot the part about beating penguins with a bat


:lol: LOL! :lol:
Damn your right Candace! :doh:
Well maybe it will be in the next one! ;)
Or I could just make it really personal for him and just say I want to beat in a wheelchair! :think:
On second thought, then people might think I'm a very unpleasent person who likes to beat up people with a handicap! :think:
Puinguins it is then! :P

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Thats good and very true.

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from pm by : Crimz0nKisses wrote:
i LOVES it. reminds me of something that's happened to me before. writing about your personal expierences, i think, makes it so much better. i like it, awesome job.


Another good reaction! :D
That makes me feel good! :D

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Very nice poem Rik!

Your next one should be about the joys of penguin bashing :P


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Very good Rik :thumbsup: ..I can tell that it's from the heart,it's sad but you wrote it well.I really like the last part too :)

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Very good Rik :thumbsup: ..I can tell that it's from the heart,it's sad but you wrote it well.I really like the last part too :)


I agree that it's a bit sad! But can't be happy all of the time ofcource! (atleast I know I can't!)
Anyways lets just say it wasn't the best time I had in my live! But writing it down really helped! :)

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I really like it. For a first time writing a poem, it is very good. My favorite part,...

"Some say that no man is an island,
But you should be careful how many
bridges you burn.
Because before you know it,
you’ll have nowhere else to turn."

...Brings up a very powerful emotion. It's also so very true.


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Very well written, I like it a lot; especially the last part. :thumbsup:

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Servant_Of_Satan wrote:
from pm by : Crimz0nKisses wrote:
i LOVES it. reminds me of something that's happened to me before. writing about your personal expierences, i think, makes it so much better. i like it, awesome job.


Another good reaction! :D
That makes me feel good! :D


yes! rik's my hero. :dancingbanana: :dancingelephant: :bouncy: :urock:


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Well Karen's remark about the first one being sad got me thinking!
It's not sad without a reason and it's gonna stay the way it is believe me!
But there has been one person who has really been a great help when I was having problems with the person the first "poem" is about!
She was always there for me when I needed her and she is without a doubt my best friend! (and now that I know how best friends can be I'm kinda ashamed I even called him that, but that's beside the point)

She means a hole lot to me and because of that I want to dedicate this one too : Melanie Bronkhof!!

Some friends come and some friends go.
Some friends leave and just seem too say no.
But some friends stick by you even when times are tough.
Those are the people you really want to know.

That is when you know you’ve got people you can depend on!

Sometimes life just really gets you down.
Life seems like a massive ocean and your
only choice seems to be swim or drown.
And just when you feel like giving up,
someone comes along and takes you back
into town.

That is when you know you’re not alone in this live!

Some people just help you when your not at your best.
Not wanting anything in return,
no money, no treasure chest.
They do this because they love you and they are you’re friend,
they just want to see you happy.
They do this because they are just that,
a friend.

That is when you realize there are still people who want the best for you and don’t expect anything in return... that is when you realize there are still who deserve to be called... friend!


Rik!

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Two beautiful poems Rik. I love them!!! :bow: :clap: I really hope your old friend realises what a dumbass he was now that he's lost you!

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