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 Post subject: Queen of the end of time
 Post Posted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 5:35 am 
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Shrouded in darkness,
loneliness consumes me

forsaken by love
my heart is defeated

empowered by rage
this body grows stronger

longing for freedom
I emerge

Kings kneel
knight die
children cry
while there fathers parish
in effort to end my chaos
women and children turn to ash
in the flame left in my wake

innocents
no-longer exists

civilisation will end
cause there is no one to stop me
I alone can end the suffering
but choose not to cause of the pain they caused me

Vampire and mortal alike
will tremble with fear when they hear my name

AKASHA!

This is a poem I weote for this poetry site I submit to. I just wanted to hear what you all think of it. trying to be a writer so i try to hear what alot of people have to say about it.
heres a link to more of my poetry

http://allpoetry.com/poets/lestat666

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It sounds cool


but you aren't going to turn into "Jeremy" are you?


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It sounds cool


but you aren't going to turn into "Jeremy" are you?


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thats quite good.....whats the poetry cite u submit to...


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I like it very much, I'm trying to be a writer myself, but I tend to suffer from writer's block alot, but I did put a somewhat poem at my journal. I also like how it involves vampires. :clap:


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XIII wrote:
thats quite good.....whats the poetry cite u submit to...


ita called allpoetry.com. its a great place to post your poetry and have others critique your work

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Boeing666 wrote:
It sounds cool


but you aren't going to turn into "Jeremy" are you?



huh?

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thats really good!!!

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