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greymatter wrote:
granted, it is a strange poem but i've never gotten that interpretation before! 8O

and no...that's not what i had in mind, haha. if you knew me you'd know i would never write about anything like that! it does have kind of a sexual feel to it i guess. i based it on when i used to cut myself in the shower and it kind of morphed into something weird. i was trying to ridicule how some people believe everything has to have a distinct label and how shallow people are sometimes.


OK, after reading it again with that bit of knowledge, I see now. The imagery can be viewed both ways, which I think is very good.

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He.. I've made an ending but it's not the finish I think... :D May be my thoughts will continued :lol:

See my shadow's
Approaching (to) you...
I'll be trying to eclipse you
Just to convince you to be with me...


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This one was written after the listening to one guy's composition "Back To Home", I'll try to download it soon to you to listen :D

Back To Home

I have gone...
Forever
I have gone...
To nowhere
I have gone...
But my sun is still shining

Kill my sun...
With your lies
Kill my sun...
With your clouds
I have fallen down to nowhere
without my light...

Feeling rain...
On my skin...
I'm feeling rain...
And within
I can feel...
That my sun is still shining...

I'm going back to home...
Going back to home...


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i did this one in 7th grade(two years ago)

i feel locked up by the darkness that surounds me.i hear screams and yells but i cant reach them.i feel nothing but the walls of darkness that blocks me from everything i wish to see.i scream and yell for someone but noone can hear me.you ignore me all the time that every time someone does the darker it gets to be.in my mind i see everything all nice but what i see isnt the same as i want it to be.


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@ chika, mmmm.... :P Gothic thoughts are around :roll:


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@cri, very good! I've always been a fan of terse, compact poetry...trying to say the most in the least amount of words. I liked that...

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Thank you, !ccfoo! :D I'm very pleased that I have a little of talent... :? :)
I'm very confused that I've written the poetry influenced by that music... Well, just now I don't have any time to download it, but soon I'll give you the link!! :P lalala lalala lalala... :lol:


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@cri, i love your poetry, its even more impressive that your writing in english, which isnt your 1st language
great job keep it up

@chika, thats really good :thumbsup:

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:oops: Really? :cry: - tears of happiness :D
I really didn't expect that such things would have happened to me.. Thanks! :D


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- Here's one I did about a month ago... Like a stupid cross between Prose and poetry. Wrote it in an emotional rage. it's too long for it's own good, so I had to edit it: -

You care?
I'm sorry, that's impossible.
You can’t
I won’t allow you
I won't allow you to see my face.

"Stop it, please shut up,"
I say with the deepest of respect.
Things I saw as lies start to fool me once again.
I cannot take this
Nothing is making any sense anymore

Nights, weeks, days ago,
I was perfectly fine.
I'm sorry life had to change
I'm sorry the world had to alter.

I’m sorry, I’m sorry,
I do want to be your friend,
But how many times do I need to say it?
But this is for your own good
Give yourself some time, not wasting it on me.

No, it’s not over yet
We’re giving the connection a painful death.
Can’t we just let go now?
I’m sick of being stuck on your makeshift lifeline.
Oh, just cut the cord and let it die
I can’t bare to feel the pain of holding on any longer.

You care?
I'm sorry that's impossible.
You cared for the one you once knew.
Watch as the bones and skin scatter
Amongst a sea of chaos and idiots.

And as all our bones scatter
They get lost and fractured.
My skin is no longer mine
Stretched and skewed, I am no longer me.

- 8O Yeah, it fuckin sucks. -

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@cri..lol i was a messed up child :oops:

@senna..thank you very much nice to know people like it


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@ chika, but I liked it!! :D

I want to post another one sad song, strangely but I don't want to cry after it...

"Gold"
Making my tears gold
You're trying to save your dirty soul
Denying all that you have done
And hurting deeper my heart-hole

I'm trying to save my last hope
With closing my eyes
(Not to see you)
All my dreams're ruined...

Forever...
I'll never turn around...
Forever...
I won't let you take my heart...
Forever...
With dazzle lies you won't survive inside (of me)...

Making my tears gold
You're trying to keep me far away
I don't know if I've something done
But it does not goes with your lies...

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